I took the advice of one member from the Tuesday night group and reworked my short story. I tried to add more detail and emotion. I now realize that I don’t put enough of these two ingredients into my writing to make my work interesting. When I write without description or feelings, then the writing is flat. It’s that old SHOW DON’T TELL thing bugging me again. I tend to just tell what happened without creating a scene. I need to bring in the senses–touch, smell, taste, etc. and create a little tension in each scene.
I’m going to work on this all week and read my new, improved copy next week to see if I’m on the right track.